14 April 25, 2014
Dear Sir /Madam,
We are writing to express our idea for a new television show for teenagers. It was designed by us based on our knowledge about them.
We would like to begin by informing you that we are a group of teachers that see our students’ fears, doubts and problems. So, we are aware of their worries and we would like your company to produce a TV show dealing with teenagers’ interests based on our ideas. At the same time, this show would help them to realize about the decisions they make and the consequences they will bring in their future.
Taking into account these reasons, we thought about a comedy-drama show about a group of friends that are 17 years old. The group is made up of a girl, Sarah, and three boys, Thomas, Kevin and John. They met in the kindergarten, but they stopped seeing each other at the age of twelve. Life met them again when Sarah, Thomas and Kevin were informed that John has a strange disease and needs a huge amount of money to begin a medical treatment. In order to help him to get money, these three teenagers decide to make sales and organize festivals and concerts. Meanwhile, the characters will enjoy funny moments together and help each other to face certain problems such as adolescent pregnancy, drugs, death and the pressure of their parents to decide a future profession. Therefore we consider that a good name for the program would be "John’s diary" owing to the fact that John keeps a diary in which he writes about the difficulties that he and his friends have to overcome in their daily life.
To put it briefly, we are sure that our show will be enjoyed by all the families, not to mention the fact that would be appealing to teenage viewers.
We look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Fabiana Ibañez
Paola Barros
Rocío Gulin
I would totally watch this tv show!!! I really liked the idea of being teachers that actually know the situations that teenagers go through. The letter is very clear and staight to the point.
ReplyDeleteI think this is a very good idea. This programme would mean a different way of representing adolescence on TV. The topics you suggest, shown from the point of view of teenagers, express a way of building adolescence which is different from the way television has been building it.
ReplyDeleteI really love this project! It's very well connected with the reality teenagers live in.
ReplyDeleteMy only doubt is related to grammar (I think) in the last paragraph: ..."not to mention the fact that would be appealing to teenage viewers." Isn't there a missing pronoun (it) before "would"?
Actually, I do not like TV shows... Anyway, I think most teenagers will love yours! They are intrested in the topics you have proposed.
ReplyDeleteIt might be just a nonsense but in the second paragraph it is not very clear what are "our ideas" and in the third one when you explain the plot I would have written everything in Simple Present.
Nice show! Solidarity, that´s what we need! Great topic to deal with teens, friends and families. A good idea about this " teens reunion" after a long time ago. Frienship through time is still present,
ReplyDeleteHello girls. It is a really nice idea. I think that this proposal could be interesting for young adults...since the character is a teenager and the center of the plot. But as Nico said last monday all the main characters are the center of the plot!! then Blas explained that new novels have many main characters. Regarding the style there is one sentence that does not convince me. It is this one: "Therefore we consider that a good name for the show would be" I am not sure if "would be" is ok, it sounds like a spanish thinking rather than english. I would write: " Therefore we consider that a good name for the show "is" rather than would "be". I not sure anyways.
ReplyDeleteOh, it just looks as if we have shared the same book to write letters. OK, it was surely the same book, haha. Nice idea! We had thought something similar at the very beginning of our discussion, but we ended up with other thing.
ReplyDeleteThe letter is clear, I liked the idea of the show, it is quite formal (which is a positive thing,) and I loved that you oriented your arguments to our conditions as teachers. Great job girls!
I think it is a great idea. As Nico said, we thought about something very similar at first but then some other thing came up. As regards style for me it is ok.
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